The fabulous Brenda Drake is hosting a contest on her blog and I am jumping in for the fun of it (I mean, what better reason, right?). All participants are to post the first line from their completed manuscript (any genre). As followers of the blog, it's your job to critique said first line to make it the best it can be.
So here's the first line of Between, my young adult paranormal romance:
Ravi's lips were soft and familiar against mine, but my mind was elsewhere, obsessing about my upcoming finals.
What do you think? Leave your comments below. Skip over to Brenda's blog to check out the other entries and provide feedback on one-liners all across the web!
Special thanks to agent Weronika Janczuk for providing page crits to the winners!